Daylight’s Net (pt2)

[from Graham]

We are now closing in on the end… Link #33 awaits us – 3 lines (MISC). Hopefully we can have a selection made by this time next week.

Have a wonderful Sunday, wherever you are and look forward to reading your submissions,

Graham

.

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we’ll travel north
and put down roots
among coconuts

hmmm…maybe that ‘commits kannonbiraki’? (tree/roots- persimmon/ coconut) I’m not sure, but I couldn’t resist posting it anyway.

we’ll travel north
and cast our fate
to the trade winds

lorin

good luck flows
in and out
in mysterious ways

or

a turtle on the log
crossing the torrent (O)

in another world
we hope we’ll
get on better

or

a turtle on the log
crossing the torrent (O)

his last two entries…
spam and beans
spam and beans

bat

high above the ravine
a suspension bridge –
five planks missing

gen

sliding down the bank
with a jam sandwhich
I eat more sand
(Rhonda)

selling raffle tickets
with his big eyes
a schoolboy

ashley

126 Responses to Daylight’s Net (pt2)

  1. origa says:

    Oh, there are so many news here in Issa’s Snail, and I am late to all this! 🙂

    Thanks, Graham, for choosing my verse. And thank you everyone for your congrats and comments!

    There is a Russian proverb: “Patience and hard work will grind everything” (Terpenie i trud vse peretrut) — which might be interpreted like this: “with patience and persistent work one can overcome all obstacles”. English has its equvalents to that: Little strokes fell great oaks; Patience wins the day; etc.

    Now, the turtle should prove it 🙂

  2. g’day Graham

    Please note that peace and love is not part of my offer for the verse. Perhaps Ashley can remove that from the above list.

    Thanks again.
    Peace and Love

  3. Aldia says:

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent

    drowning his soul
    Calamity Jane
    saves another man

    or

    newly blended family
    boards the airplane
    rising from the destruction

    or

    new day
    rises with the sun
    Ode to Joy

    I just love Beethoven’s 9th symphoney, so I can’t help myself using Ode to Joy in another ku

  4. ashleycapes says:

    hanging from
    the persimmon tree
    all my sons (s)

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (o)

    from wall to wall
    graffiti
    directs the traffic

  5. origa says:

    from wall to wall
    graffiti
    directs the traffic

    This is hilarious, Ashley — love the humor in this link! 🙂

    ———————————

    Rhonda — your jam sandwhich is wonderful, too!

    • ashleycapes says:

      Thanks, Origa! I was hoping it’d work – I was just struck by the movement in yours and the idea of permance too – in a turtle showing strength and hanging on, and the way graffiti is ‘stuck’ on a wall etc

  6. Aldia says:

    revision please…it’s amazing what little morphine from a hospital bed can do…or not, but here is my revision:

    drowning his soul
    Calamity Jane
    to the rescue

    bulldog bit my leg and now I have a majot infection…..it really BITES!!!! 🙂

  7. Rhonda Poholke says:

    Butterfly’s shadow
    falls
    on my cupcake

  8. Rhonda Poholke says:

    Sorry, left out the start

    a butterfly’s shadow
    falls
    on my cupcake

    thankyou Origa

  9. Anne Elvey says:

    Congratulations, Origa.
    Thanks for your comment on humpty dumpty, Graham.

  10. lorin says:

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    one long wish
    while the Tuttle comet
    passes Andromeda

    lorin

  11. Aldia says:

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torent (Origa)

    home again
    home again
    doing a jig

  12. Genevieve Osborne says:

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    nowhere to go, so
    in
    goes her head

    nowhere to go
    in
    goes her head

    nowhere to go
    so
    in goes her head

  13. Genevieve Osborne says:

    nowhere to go
    so – in
    goes her head

  14. Anne Elvey says:

    some responses:

    peak hour
    suits climb
    the escalator

    one red hat
    escapes
    from the crowd

    water shortage –
    she saves
    her tears

    glossy beans
    spill into the coffee
    grinder

  15. Genevieve Osborne says:

    Hi Anne, I like your ‘one red hat’ and ‘water shortage’.

  16. lorin says:

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    sitting by the brisbane river
    listening
    to your muddy confessions

    by Agniesza Niemira ( found on ‘Haiku Dreaming Australia’)

    🙂

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    at the ouija board
    channeling a sabaki
    from the other side

    🙂

    lorin

  17. Anne Elvey says:

    Thanks for the comment Genevieve. Nice to have you back here, Lorin. I like your graffiti ku, Ashley.

  18. Sandra says:

    Just a note to all the great writers involved with this Kasen (reading and writing). Please note that the closing date for the Katikati Haiku Contest is rapidly approaching – April 16.

    Find entry details here:

    http://www.poetrysociety.org.nz/haikunews/competitions

    Many thanks for your support for this great project,
    Sandra

  19. ashleycapes says:

    Sorry kasen folks! I’ve had to steal Graham away for some time, we’ve been working on an article together so we’ll be back in force here soon!

  20. Willie says:

    You are cordially invited to our third moon viewing party of 2010!
    The full moon rises on Tuesday, March 30th.

    To submit a poem (all submissions remain the property of its author) you may email me here: williamsorlien@yahoo.com
    or just post in comments at the HAIKU BANDIT SOCIETY : http://haikubanditsociety.blogspot.com

    Be sure to include your pen name so we might accredit your poems properly!

    • gnunn says:

      Hello there snailers,

      I feel like the proverbial snail, or Origa’s turtle on the log… I humbly apologise for the long delay after a promise of speed… hopefully for the next link, I will keep that promise.

      But I do like to have a clear headspace when I approach the task of selecting a link… each link deserves all of my attention, so here goes. The fabulous five I have been considering for link #33 are:

      from wall to wall
      graffiti
      directs the traffic

      (Ashley)

      My eyes are often drawn away from the road (much to my lovely wife’s dismay), lured to the beauty/obscenity/absurdity etc… of the graffiti that adorns so much of our modern landscape. This, like the graffit, stopped me in my tracks, made me ponder exactly what the graffiti would depict or say… obviously it is powerful stuff though as, as it is managing to direct the traffic. Love it!

      at the ouija board
      channeling a sabaki
      from the other side

      (Lorin)

      Love the humour in this Lorin… it kicks hard! And I also have to say a huge thank you for sharing the poem by Agnieszka. It was a lovely poem and would have provided an excellent link in this renku.

      sliding down the bank
      with a jam sandwhich
      I eat more sand

      (Rhonda)

      I think we have all been here… The ‘sandy sandwich’ is a part of every Australian childhood (and I imagine is common worldwide)… and sliding down sand dunes, well I still can’t get enough of that!

      in another world
      we hope we’ll
      get on better

      (Barbara)

      Really enjoyed the mix of hope and despair in this poem… the dark mood of the present, so beautifully illumined by the hope for a better future.

      nowhere to go
      so – in
      goes her head

      (Geneveive)

      Such a strong link back to the imagery of the turtle Geneveive. There is alot going on in this poem – the play on the saying, ‘pull your head in’, the vision of being cornered/having ones choices limited, the curtailing of the will. A very powerful poem!

      So after much deliberation, I have chosen Lorin’s ‘at the ouija board’ for its distinct imagery and playful twist. I am sure it will help us all to channel something special for link #34 – 2 lines, Spring.

      Take care and happy writing,

      Graham
      grahamnunn.wordpress.com

  21. lorin says:

    Thanks, Graham! I’m so glad you see the humour. 🙂 Delighted to have this one in the renku.

    Like you, I thought the Agniesza Niemira haiku was a very good candidate for the spot.

    Lorin

  22. ashleycapes says:

    Yeah! Nice shift in the piece, really opens things up again, congrats, Lorin!

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    at the ouija board
    channeling a sabaki
    from the other side (Lorin)

    from over the fence
    a roar from yet another lawn mower

    (maybe just ‘mower’ that one seems a little long)

  23. lorin says:

    over the fence
    the roar of his lawnmower

    ?

    Whaddaya think, Ashley?

    lorin

    • lorin says:

      … I have the bloody neighbour with the brush cutter! Every Sunday morning! For a 4 x 4 lawn at the front, & a 4x 6 lawn at the back.

      o, they call brush cutters by some twee brand name now…’whipper snipper’…they make the same noise, though.

      My fate is, every time I try to write a poem, city or country, my own back yard or park, along comes a bloke with a brush cutter.

      lorin

    • ashleycapes says:

      Yeah! That’s much better!

      Know that feeling, love the early morning lawn mowing. Really kicks off your average Sunday huh?

  24. lorin says:

    ps… thanks! 😉

  25. Anne Elvey says:

    Congratulations Lorin. Interesting movement in the renku.

  26. Anne Elvey says:

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    at the ouija board
    channeling a sabaki
    from the other side (Lorin)

    through a blossoming plum
    night’s crystal ball

    finding in her palm
    a first love

  27. ashleycapes says:

    Greetings, Snailers!

    Just popping in with some news, I’ve been approached to lead a ‘zombie’ renku at Cordite and we’re kicking off today, love to have everyone’s support!

    Ash

    http://www.cordite.org.au/newsblog/zombie-haikunaut-renga-instructions/

  28. g’day all

    That’ll be fun, Ashley.

    Congratulations Lorin!

    Herewith some offers:

    at the ouija board
    channeling a sabaki
    from the other side (Lorin)

    with the last red peg
    first raindrops

    or

    at the ouija board
    channeling a sabaki
    from the other side (Lorin)

    swallows’ perfect pointillism
    a welcome on the doormat

    or

    at the ouija board
    channeling a sabaki
    from the other side (Lorin)

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout

    Peace and Love

  29. lorin says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout

    Love this, Barbara! From spooky to Spring!

    lorin

  30. g’day Lorin

    Thanks for your positive comments.

    Peace and Love

  31. Rhonda Poholke says:

    Hi Ashley – congratulations on the zombie renku – sounds interesting –

  32. Rhonda Poholke says:

    Oh and hi Lorin – nice one

  33. Rhonda Poholke says:

    come the path’s end
    always another flower

  34. Claire says:

    so, writing again my stanzas for link 33…
    Would have been kind to tell me to do so, some plot there ?

    a turtle on the log
    crossing the torrent (Origa)

    back to origins
    that special fragrance
    o being hugged again

    now safe on the sand
    among tiles and walls
    an oyster’s mother of pearl

    right in front of you
    an Eden shines
    all in almond paste

    his horse at rest
    the Indian sniffs –
    where is the river source ?

    • ashleycapes says:

      No plot, Claire, just a mis-communication 🙂

      This is something I posted on March 3 on the other thread

      March 3, 2010 at 7:45 am | Reply ashleycapes

      Sorry that I didn’t do this much earlier, but I’m splitting the kasen into a new page to speed things up – hopefully that fixes the slow response time some of you have experienced!

      See ‘d&d kasen pt2′

      And you posted directly under it on march 23 (so you and must have missed it it at the time)

      “Hi everybody !
      (sorry to be so late)…”

  35. Claire says:

    sorry, the second one was, in fact :

    now safe on the sand
    among tiles and walls

    an oyster’ s mother of pearl

  36. Claire says:

    Please, Lorin, what’s a sabaki ?

    Can’t find the word on Merriam-W, nor Chambers, Longman…

    Thanxs to tell-me,

    Claire

  37. lorin says:

    Claire, it’s a Japanese word that has several meanings according to context. In renku/ renga:

    ‘ sōshō (宗匠?): May also be called sabaki (捌き?). The coordinator of an ichiza, he or she is responsible for the completion of a renga. Has the authority to dismiss an improper verse. The most experienced of the renju should be the sōshō to keep the renga interesting. ‘

    from wikipedia:

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Renga

    In the case of this renku, Graham is the sabaki… leader/coordinator of the renku.

    Ashley, in the terminology of renku/ renga, is the

    ” teishu (亭主?): The patron of a renga gathering, who provides the place.”

    …and is to be honoured as such, as you would if invited to somebody’s house as a guest.

    Why are you posting verses on this thread for a position that a verse has already been selected for? I suggest you go back & read Ashley’s *two* posts to you, and notice the link to this page he supplied for you, just in case you hadn’t been able to find this page.

    lorin

  38. Rhonda Poholke says:

    Thanks Ashley – the renku is already shaping up nice and zombie-ish

  39. Claire says:

    Hello Ashley,

    I”m really sorry – Ive shown my best side, “naughty girl” !
    I explained Lorin, never have I thougt to post them again on this page – haven’t realized in my lateness, that Graham was commenting while I was posting the fourth one… That’s it and I can’t go back to… before… channelling myself !!
    Well, now thinking at my next – hope to come soon. And hope you don’t mind too much onmy stupid attitude.

  40. Genevieve Osborne says:

    Hi everyone,

    Yes, I also love the spectre/new sapling ku Barbara.

    An offer:

    at the ouija board
    channelling a sabaki
    from the other side (l)

    on a warm morning –
    hearing celestial verses

    or

    this warm morning –
    lost in celestial verses

  41. Anne Elvey says:

    Yes, Barbara I like your sapling ku, too,

    and Genevieve, your celestial voices, with a slight preference for the second version.

    two more:

    “weeds, in wheels,
    shoot long and lovely” (GMH)

    bees find in blossom
    a honeyed voice

  42. Genevieve Osborne says:

    Thanks Anne.

    another try:

    this arch of clear blue –
    adrift on spring verses

    or

    this bowl of clear blue –
    adrift on spring verses

  43. Genevieve Osborne says:

    one more:

    one hundred spring verses
    adrift in the blue

  44. Aldia says:

    nicely done, Lorin!

    at the ouija board
    channelling a sabaki
    from the other side (l)

    breaking through
    daffodils brighten the footpath

    feet dandling
    sitting on top of the world

  45. Aldia says:

    at the ouija board
    channelling a sabaki
    from the other side (l)

    the grass is always greener
    over the septic tank

    • Anne Elvey says:

      Nice one, Aldia. I like the humour in it.

    • gnunn says:

      Hi everyone,

      Our renku is now coming to a close, with only a couple of selections to follow. It has been such an inspirational experience for me and I cannot begin to thank you all enough for your participation and patience… I know I am far from the speediest person on this earth.

      So this time around we are looking for link #34 – 2 lines Spring and as always there were many wonderful contributions. here are the four that I have been pondering over in making my final decision:

      the grass is always greener
      over the septic tank

      (Aldia)

      Great wordplay here Aldia. The Septic Tank certainly makes things green, but it is a really unusual image to find in a Spring poem. I love the way this poem whacks multiple senses.

      where the spectre was
      new saplings sprout

      (Barbara)

      Superb Barbara! Has a real otherworldly feel to it. Love the way the new life seems to be born from an old ghost… and links so well back to Lorin’s ouija board poem.

      this warm morning –
      lost in celestial verses

      (Genevieve)

      Another stunning poem Genevieve… lost in celestial voices is such a great line and like Barbara’s links back beautifully to Lorin’s ouija board poem. This feels like you had been awake for many hours and the warmth of morning crept up on you.

      come the path’s end
      always another flower

      (Rhonda)

      What a gem Rhonda. Such hope in this poem and it echoes much of my personal philosophy, so there was a real connection for me. Made me go back and listen to Springsteen’s ‘Atlantic City’ for one of my favourite ever lines in a song – ‘everything dies baby that’s a fact, but maybe everything that dies someday comes back’.

      Any one of these poems would make a fine addition to our renku… in fact I think this has been one of my hardest decisions yet. So, for link #34 I have chosen Barbara’s ‘where the spectre was’. And now we move to our 2nd last link – #35, 3 lines Flower/Spring.

      Hope you all enjoy your weekends,

      Graham

  46. Genevieve Osborne says:

    Congratulations Barbara, it’s a great verse and thank you Graham for such nice comments.

  47. lorin says:

    Congratulations, Barbara. It’s a great verse, imo.

    For some reason I can also connect it with last year’s bushfires here around Melbourne. Some of those burnt trees certainly took on the appearance of spectres. What a suoerb word it is!

    lorin

  48. lorin says:

    …superb (typo)

  49. lorin says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout

    (Barbara)

    a tiny spider
    stitching forget-me-not
    to forget-me-not

  50. Genevieve Osborne says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    spring dance –
    her dress of sprigged muslin
    and green satin slippers

  51. Genevieve Osborne says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    on the bluebells – falling
    through the trees
    spring rain

  52. lorin says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout

    (Barbara)

    back from a bushwalk
    banksia candles
    glow in the vase

  53. lorin says:

    or:

    after a bushwalk
    banksia candles
    glow in the vase

  54. Aldia says:

    Congrats, Barbara! Lorin, I really like your tiny spider ku.

  55. Genevieve Osborne says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    show day – round
    the neck of each goat
    a garland of roses

    or

    show day – each cow
    wears
    a garland of roses

  56. Genevieve Osborne says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    he’s picking her
    a bunch
    of paper daisies

  57. Genevieve Osborne says:

    or

    he’s picking her
    a posy
    of paper daisies

  58. Genevieve Osborne says:

    or:

    paper daisies –
    a carpet laid
    across the hills

  59. lorin says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    notes of bellbirds
    nectar of gum blossoms
    all the way home

  60. Aldia says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    a nest is built
    in the cherry tree-
    life blossoms

  61. lorin says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    yellow wattle
    in her yellow hair
    she’s the princess fairy

  62. ashleycapes says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    even this weed has
    a little flower
    for the sun

    just one try for now!

  63. Anne Elvey says:

    Congratulations Barbara.
    Lots of lovely offerings already for the next.

    Will try one:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    last spring in Devon —
    a palette of pastels
    around the red fox

  64. Aldia says:

    pastel tulips
    scatter the walkway
    childhood welcome mat

    jumping contest
    on our pogo sticks
    new spring toy

  65. Genevieve Osborne says:

    I like your pogo stick Aldia, and your weed Ashley.

    Last one from me,

    in a grove of aspens
    the surprise of wild
    roses

  66. Claire says:

    Hi everybody,

    forsythias blooming, here

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    a hana haiku
    on the Listeners’ sign post
    poppies all over

    flower to flower…
    the scent of lilies
    in the gentle breeze

  67. lorin says:

    a hana haiku
    on the Listeners’ signpost
    poppies all over

    flower to flower…
    the scent of lilies
    in the gentle breeze

    These are both excellent, Claire.

    (I’ve elided sign post into one word, above, as that’s how it’s usually written)

  68. Claire says:

    Hello everybody, a third one,

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    her spring gift
    a bird of paradise flower
    in a notched vase

  69. Rhonda Poholke says:

    losing a contact lense
    in long clover –
    her downfall

  70. Claire says:

    Hi again, for a fourth one (if allowed, don’t remember)

    resplendent spring sun
    the shticks
    of blooming orchirds

  71. Aldia says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    harbinger of spring
    soft pussywillows
    blossom in the swamp

  72. Anne Elvey says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    nodding in shadow
    a greenhood
    orchid

  73. Anne Elvey says:

    a crimson spider
    orchid rare
    in daylight’s net

  74. John Carley says:

    Hi everybody, sorry to butt into the strand. I’ve set up a page ‘Exercises’ to take any subsequent exchanges.

    http://www.renkureckoner.co.uk/beta

    I’ve been working on some exercises to add to the Renku Reckoner site. They are in a temporary folder at the url above.

    I’d be very grateful if people would have a look and give any kind of feedback on this site or direct to johncarley at virginmedia dot com

    Specifically – there’s an exercise there based on a very old Chinese verse form that might qualify for a little more serious consideration. Please have a look at the Haizekku (provisionial name, might be ‘New Zekku’).

    As you’ll see there’s provision on the page for some exemplars. How do you fancy attempting some?

    PS – my friend and colleague Eiko Yachimoto has picked up some finger damage with consequent difficulty typing these last several weeks. Hence the no show to date in terms of a further short poem led by her.

    Please post any comments (or Haizekku first verses etc) you might wish to make in this strand.

    Best wishes, John

  75. willie says:

    You are cordially invited to our fourth moon viewing party of 2010!
    The full moon rises on Wednesday, April 28th.

    To submit a poem (all submissions remain the property of its author) you may email me here: williamsorlien@yahoo.com
    or just post in comments at the HAIKU BANDIT SOCIETY : http://haikubanditsociety.blogspot.com

    Be sure to include your pen name so we might accredit your poems properly!

  76. sandra says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout

    (Barbara)

    lying in wait
    for the unwary –
    hyacinths!

    bike basket
    full of tulips –
    an icy dusk

    Nice to drop back in and see so many fine verses here, and how the poem has grown!

    • Aldia says:

      Sandra, I like your bike basket full of tulips –
      What a lovely image, it makes me want to put a basket on my bicycle and fill it with all kinds of spring flowers!

  77. Anne Elvey says:

    where the spectre was
    new saplings sprout (Barbara)

    a yellow freesia
    loose in an old book –
    packing up again

  78. John Carley says:

    Hi everybody, sorry to butt into the strand. Good news though.

    After becoming involved in an altercation between a large piece of bamboo and a very sharp knife the internationally renowned renku poet Eiko Yachimoto has managed to reattach all her typing fingers. She will therefore shortly be appearting here at The Snail in order to lead a new sequence.

    Accordingly check out the page New Sequence (tab at head of this page). Soonest.

    Best wishes, John

  79. g’day all

    Congratulations! We’ve just passed our first anniversary patiently linking and shifting on this journey….

    Where is Graham? Are you ok?

    Peace and Love

  80. Claire says:

    Hi there !

    Wattle has bloomed in february in the south, as it does every year. However, two days ago, snow fell on the Pyrenees, Alps, and Massif-Central ! And, a six meters high wave in Cannes. Is the earth still the good place for our sort ? Wondering about that. Is Graham having zen on Mount Fuji ??! Ashley, along ?! Well, this is none of my business !
    Well, Sandra, we are only one year old, let us grow up peacefully !

    turning on itself
    Mount Fuji has
    no way out

    But, rhubarb is coming !

    Peace and Love (if you don’t mind…)

    • gnunn says:

      Hello everyone,

      Thank you all for your patience… after being away in South Australia for the Australian Poetry Centre’s Salt on the Tongue festival, I have been struggling to claw my way back to some sort of middle ground. But I have been checking in regularly and watching each entry and the new projects start to grow… my mind needs some sort of calm however to really absorb each of the poems and to work through the decision making process. Today seems to have brought that calm… so here are my thoughts on several of the poems submitted for link #35 (3 lines flower/Spring).

      There was just no way i could limit myself to five choices, in fact it was a struggle to limit myself to just 7 poems…

      bike basket
      full of tulips –
      an icy dusk

      (Sandra)

      So great to have your voice back here Sandra. This is beautifully simple… the image of the tulips bunched together in the bike basket seems to illuminate the face of the rider (I am picturing a young girl) as they shiver their way into dusk. While Spring here in Brisbane is often very warm (definitely no icy dusks), this captured the beauty of that seasonal change, and the how the last of winter’s chill seems to linger.

      a crimson spider
      orchid – rare
      in daylight’s net

      (Anne)

      So delicate and fragile Anne. An intricate image that caught me on first reading and has drawn me back several times to let the image unwind. For me this has a real burst of colour.

      losing a contact lense
      in long clover –
      her downfall

      (Rhonda)

      Love this Rhonda. Being a person who once wore contact lenses (can’t seem to do it anymore), this made me laugh out loud. So playful, yet has that edge of frustration burning below the surface…

      jumping contest
      on our pogo sticks
      new spring toy

      (Aldia)

      Also love the playfulness of this poem Aldia… such a great take on Spring! And indeed, pogo sticks are the perfect Spring toy! I can remember being given one many many years ago and playing endlessly on it… such a rush of emotion.

      even this weed has
      a little flower
      for the sun

      (Ashley)

      The simplicity of this poem is again what makes it resonate. It has a joy about it… it not only revels in the beauty of the weed, but presents it as a gift of life. Thanks so much for this one Ash.

      a tiny spider
      stitches forget-me-not
      to forget-me-not

      (Lorin)

      Another stunning poem Lorin… can see this so vividly. For me it seems dew-soaked. So many mornings I marvel at the intricate work of the spiders who have toiled throughout the night… the simple twist of stitching the forget-me-nots together, really elevated this poem beyond the observational.

      a hana haiku
      on the Listeners’ signpost
      poppies all over

      (Claire)

      and finally Claire… well, what can I say. A fine verse for me to finish on today… the poppies providing a wonderful shock of colour in the third line.

      Thank you all again for your words… this really has been a pleasure. A year in the making… well, I know for me it has all been worth it.

      So my choice for link #35… well I have decided to go with Anne’s crimson spider orchid.

      And now there is but one poem to bring this home… Ashley, please let me know if you want this thrown open to the group to conclude or whether you would like me to write the closing poem… I remember discussing this with you some time ago but have since forgotten what you would like to happen.

      Hope you are all well,

      Graham

  81. ashleycapes says:

    Hi Graham! Great choice – and I agree, lots of stunning choices to look over this time, must have been a very hard choice!

    You’re right – I think that because I started the renku and led for only a little while, that you ought to have the honour of ageku, because you’ve done, by far, the most work on our kasen!

    So if you can, that would be superb, would really looking forward to your closer, and thanks again for leading so well!

  82. Anne Elvey says:

    Hi Graham and Ashley
    I just checked in after teaching all day and was stunned to find you chose “a crimson spider/orchid” Graham. I feel humbled by the wonderful offerings this round, and honoured to have this chosen. It has been a lovely journey being part of the Renku. Looking forward to your closing ku, Graham.
    Ashley, when it is complete and before you take the renku down (if you decide to send it somewhere), could you make a word copy and email it to the ‘usual suspects’ (i.e the contributors) by email?
    Many thanks,
    Anne

  83. Aldia says:

    Congratulations Anne, and thank you Graham! It has been a wonderful year participating with so many amazing people. Always something to learn for me, from such a talented group! Graham, I look forward to your ageku, however a liitle sad to have this experience come to a close. Thank you for leading us so gracefully and all the hard work you generously give with your comments after each string. Well done! Well, almost done…… 🙂

  84. Claire says:

    Dear all of you,

    Thanks so much for having been with you on this (my) first renku. Graham’s surges of emotions when reading were gladly received and helpful… to the neophyte I am in haiku genre ! Of course, I feel the need to read again all those ku until being really conscious of the force of each one.
    I don’t know Anne’s thought, personnally I had had a “coup de coeur” (personnal emotion, if you want) for her freesia ku, its pepper scent in the fresh april breeze…

    So now, the ageku is going to put an end to our meditations. Let us read Graham !

    Well, I would like to tell you how this hana haiku came to me. I was around eight and had gone with my father for an outdoor’s afternoon to the big garden he had at the forest’edge. I soon got bored as I had nothing to play with, there. So boring that I took the decision to… run away… That’s how I had to run out of the forest ! It wasn’t really far, but all alone on the winding wood’s lane, I felt rather upset and ran quicker than I could. Fright, even (I wasn’t allowed to go on my own…). When I eventually got out of the wood, I had a rest at the poteau des Ecouteurs (Listeners’ Signpost) – all white with boards to the different forest’ lanes. There were no poppies at all, only grass. Then, I had to walk in an inhabited area before my own lot. My mother was still shopping, so I went to the neighbours ! Looking after me, she finally knocked their door, shocked.
    So, the Signpost and poppies are probably the symbol of my “recovery” !

  85. g’day Graham, all

    Lovely choice, congratulations Anne!

    Thanks Graham for taking us on this journey. I need to sit back and read it again and again. Looking forward to the ageku, and our title.

    Thanks everyone, it’s been a stimulating and most enjoyable trip. Again, thanks to you Ashley for organising.

    Peace and Love

  86. genevieve osborne says:

    Congratulations Anne, a lovely ku.

    Looking forward to your ageku Graham.

    All good wishes, G.

  87. Anne Elvey says:

    Thank you, Aldia, Claire, Barbara and Genevieve for your congratulations. I second the comments about Graham’s wonderful mentoring of the group. It has been good to meet you all here.
    Anne

  88. gnunn says:

    Hello all,

    It has a been a long road, somewhat reflected in my closing poem, but it is a road I am glad I have traveled with you all. I first and foremost want to thank you for your patience, as I know I am not the fastest operator, but we got there in the end and I have been lingering over this poem, allowing each link to sink further into my skin.

    So thank you to everyone who contirbuted and a very special thank you to Ashley for creatiung such a vibrant space.

    I look forward to keeping up with all of your writings over here at the Snail and other places.

    Winter warmth,

    Graham

    • ashleycapes says:

      Thank you, Graham – not such a bad thing to take our time with a renku! Loved having your support, insight and leadership here. The Snail would have been poorer without you!

      Ash

  89. g’day Graham

    are you interested in titles for our poem?

    peace and love

    • gnunn says:

      Yes of course, a title… I know renga often take the opening line as title, but I am keen to see other variations explored.

      Look forward to your suggestions!

      Graham

  90. g’day Graham

    I wondered, should the ageku not be a spring verse?

    Anyways, here’s title suggestions:

    caught on a breeze

    crossing the torrent

    the silence of signs

    channeling a sabaki

    from the other side

    the hurdles fall

    where the sun flashes

    in daylight’s net

    Peace and Love

    • ashleycapes says:

      Hi Barbara,

      I like ‘Daylight’s Net’ too

      I’ve been thinking about the ageku, and have looked back over some of John’s comments about verse which could be no-season, but are given some stronger feel of seasonality via their postion in the renku. Thus, the road & home attaint the warmth of spring, perhaps.

  91. gnunn says:

    Hi Barbara,

    I hope the ageku – the road home – has a warmth to it… wanted to capture a drive home, with that sun resonating from Anne’s previous verse, so felt that it had the warmth of a Spring verse and the quietude of wonder as driver and passenger take in the beauty of their journey.

    Out of these titles I favour: Daylight’s Net.

    Would like to hear what others think?

    Graham

  92. Anne Elvey says:

    Dear Graham,
    I love the ageku, especially the gentle bringing the reader to silence at the end of the road. I cannot comment on ‘Daylight’s net” as a title.
    Of those Barbara lists, I like “caught on a breeze”.
    Thank you again for your wise and gentle guiding of the renku, and Ashley for your vision and hospitality.
    Anne

  93. genevieve osborne says:

    Hi Graham and Everyone,

    I love the ageku too, rolling home in peace.

    Of the titles mentioned so far I like ‘Daylight’s Net’ and ‘Caught on a Breeze’.

    I also like ‘Fuchsia-Covered Walls’ and ‘The River Flows Honey’.

    I would like to add my thanks Graham for your expert guidance through this renku – all the fascinating terrain we’ve covered since May ’09 – a fine journey.

    Thank you again Ashley – this site is giving us so many excellent experiences.

    All best wishes,
    Genevieve.

  94. seems a shame not to give this masterpiece a title

    peace and love

  95. ashleycapes says:

    Yes, I think, especially in the absence of dissenting voices, that we go with ‘Daylight’s Net’ as it has been mentioned a few times!

    Will make the change to the header etc soon!

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